I'd be happy to but I'm a bit worn out at the moment, and I'd need to give both chapters a read and let it stew a bit. I'll try to post some in-depth feedback tomorrow. Also trying to do another chapter of my Unmasking Autism book club in the morning.
Thank you so much. I know I posted this quickly after the first, please take you time.
Hey, I didn't forget about you lol. I have read both chapters but I am still way too burned out for a proper analysis at the moment. My 
brain wants me to draw comparisons to other media like an IGN reviewer so here goes
I get some good Star Wars and Mass Effect vibes from the setting, but the way the characters interact reminds me mostly of the Wayfarers series by Becky Chambers. You do a lot to lay out social conventions and economic realities, maybe a bit too detailed and getting sidetracked with it sometimes, but it's a hard line to toe and you do a good job. I like Cat but I wonder why she has internalized this belief system so thoroughly in just a few years, and wonder at the people who volunteer to help her, and think she might be being taken for a ride. I don't know how illegal the stuff her smuggler friend wants her to move is, but the thing is, neither does Cat.
So I feel there's mystery here and Cat's naivete being purposeful and showing room to grow. I feel like diving into her new religion is her way of coping with the nightmare she found herself thrust into, far away from everyone and knowing nothing about anything, then awakening to a kind community who heard her say "I need to find my way in the universe (literally)" and they were like "it's funny you should say that." Pretty big coincidence.
I like it. I'll have to give more in-depth notes at a later time, but I've followed you on Wattpad and I'll keep an eye on your stories.
I'm glad to hear that you like it! This is strongly inspired by Star Wars, so I'm glad it's got good vibes and not ripoff vibes lol.
You do a lot to lay out social conventions and economic realities, maybe a bit too detailed and getting sidetracked with it sometimes, but it's a hard line to toe and you do a good job.
Yeah, honestly this is after a bunch of editing too. I'm glad to hear that I did a good job though. I was trying to do a lot of world building because I was thinking of making it a starfinder campaign before I settled on a novel. I have a "supplemental materials" story on wattpad that's unpublished with all the details I've taken out lol.
I like Cat but I wonder why she has internalized this belief system so thoroughly in just a few years, and wonder at the people who volunteer to help her, and think she might be being taken for a ride. I don't know how illegal the stuff her smuggler friend wants her to move is, but the thing is, neither does Cat.
So I feel there's mystery here and Cat's naivete being purposeful and showing room to grow. I feel like diving into her new religion is her way of coping with the nightmare she found herself thrust into, far away from everyone and knowing nothing about anything, then awakening to a kind community who heard her say "I need to find my way in the universe (literally)" and they were like "it's funny you should say that." Pretty big coincidence.
no spoilers, but your head is in the right place
Thank you again for your feedback
suspiciously helpful sidekicks and mysterious room which is closed 
real dead space vibes 
btw, did cat get her stuff from the original ship, timing is very confusing 
suspiciously helpful sidekicks and mysterious room which is closed
Yep, no spoilers though
btw, did cat get her stuff from the original ship, timing is very confusing
Like the one that Cat got to J'kelri on? There wasn't much on it, but I elaborate on it in the next chapter
Can you elaborate on timing?
Thank you for your feedback!
I meant you specifically mention "i had left my bag on the shuttle", but then they lift off , i wouldnt have thought about it otherwise . Also if i understood correctly, they lift off during sunset, shouldn't the planet be dark? And cat should be very hungry 
Yeah, Cat's bag is still on the J'kelri space ship. I guess The bag's out of the cat (that was a reach, I'm sorry)
Yeah, sunset doesn't make sense, I think I'll change that.
Cat is very hungry, but cat is used to missing meals at the monastery, and the days excitement kind of overrode that feeling.
Thank you for your feedback.
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