When I posted my first chapter, I got some good feedback and a lot to think about so I wanted to edit it and get some feedback on the second chapter, since it has a different tone. Here is a link to the edited first chapter. Thank you in advance.
edit: Thanks again for the feedback, I promise I won't post again until the story is done
I meant you specifically mention "i had left my bag on the shuttle", but then they lift off , i wouldnt have thought about it otherwise . Also if i understood correctly, they lift off during sunset, shouldn't the planet be dark? And cat should be very hungry
, i wouldnt have thought about it otherwise . Also if i understood correctly, they lift off during sunset, shouldn't the planet be dark? And cat should be very hungry 