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[-] Leg@sh.itjust.works 1 points 3 days ago

Doesn't seem that way to me? Lines 3 and 4 seem fine as two separate lines, and I'd expect a scheme of ABAB, but because it doesn't rhyme that way, it's more like ABCB (which is pretty awkward) where "garage" functions as an ill-fitting slant rhyme for "Chicago". I suppose "trouble" is kind of a slant rhyme for "Chicago" too though, so AA fits, but then we have AABA with that scheme. Not sure where AABBA can fit.

[-] dream_weasel@sh.itjust.works 2 points 3 days ago

If you got AABA:

he left his/her car, (B) at the airport garage (B)

And that produces AABBA, a limerick with bad rhyming.

[-] Leg@sh.itjust.works 2 points 3 days ago

Oh I totally see it now. Rhyming car and a garage, splitting line 3 into two lines. Dunno why I derped on that.

So Chicago is a slant rhyme for trouble and yubble, and car a poor slant rhyme for garage. I think you're right on the money.

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