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[–] [S] 0 points 9 months ago (1 child)

them back in art classroom was nice end setup

I totally agree! I think that was perfect, it's just that something was lacking in the lead up to it.

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  • [–] 1 point 9 months ago

    The part between him sitting on a train
    and going to school, in place of speed-up through daze could have easily be a single chapter of flash moments. From their meet-up, to them moving on/evolving.
    And finally their return to school (like visiting for school festival) to just be separated and find/meet in art classroom.

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