Yeah, I feel like it is trendy and would get lost amongst the sea of similar designs. So I think it fits with what OP was looking for, making it look "professional" and by extention legitimate. However I don't really think that's what is best. I like the little bee and his little hat. He's friendly. This looks too corporate for my taste. I do like the hexagon. But the bee needs his hat.
I would like to be very clear I think it looks great! It achieves what OP stated they were going for. It looks professional. I just think professional is a bit bland and not a change I'd be very enthused about. Perhaps I am in the minority however. It's not like I would fight a change to this if it was decided this would be what is best for beehaw.
I think you should be very proud! I have tried to make my own garments but always seam to mess up somewhere and then lose steam. I have found making quilts better suits my abilities but I would love to make a few boxy/camper style shirts for myself sometime.