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[–] 50 points 2 years ago* (3 children)

The awfulness of the story aside, I do want to put a small bit of appreciation toward ABC News for not dropping some bullshit like "17-year-old man dead following an officer-involved shooting during a welfare check." The voice is passive still, but at least it cuts to the point, that the kid was killed by a police officer.

My only notes are that it should say "Officer shot and killed 17-year-old while conducting a welfare check." As it is, it's like it's saying the kid was shot and killed, and it just so happened to be by an officer.

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  • [–] 7 points 2 years ago (2 children)

    My only notes are that it should say "Officer shot and killed 17-year-old while conducting a welfare check."

    I think the news would have to put allegedly in there somewhere.

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  • [–] 3 points 2 years ago (1 child)

    No ‘allegedly’ required in the passive version, so not required in the active version

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