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Thanks for the feedback! Pretty new to fiction, so this is useful.
Yeah, I didn't do an edit of this, posted more or less straight after writing. I am definitely starting to get the value of an edit/re-write to add some telegraphing of what's coming and to clean up the pacing and remove or do more to tie in loose pieces (like the knee hole). Will do that more in the future.
I might come back to this one, see how I'm feeling in a few weeks.