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[–] 70 points 3 months ago (7 children)

The third panel reads awkwardly.

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  • [–] [S] 16 points 3 months ago (6 children)

    Yeah, i thought of that, but I didn't want to switch their positions

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  • [–] 16 points 3 months ago

    Yeah, the eye flow is all messed up. The third panel, as it is, convinced my brain to switch to anime order to make sense, and then I read the fourth panel backwards and it made no sense.

    I get the problem you had, but maybe the layout of something else could have been fixed? Because as-is I think the third panel sabotaged the whole comic...

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  • [–] 24 points 3 months ago

    It took me too long to notice he's shirtless in the fourth panel and then I got stuck on how he got his tee off over that giant head. And then I wondered why his chest/shoulders are so much smaller naked. Although that part is kinda funny.

    I agree with others, use vertical stacking on the speech bubbles in panels 3 and 4 and you'll be okay for the conversation order.

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  • [–] 3 points 3 months ago

    The same but now his nips are pointy

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  • [–] 2 points 3 months ago

    She's the same, but his hair looks different:-). Probably the jacket previously blocked much of its view.

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