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So, I've read the novel, and left a review. It's good, you should continue like that. The Rpg elements weren't too annoying for me, even if I don't think they really help the story at the moment.
Otherwise, like I said in the review, occasionally it's really obvious that you're speaking through your characters. You sometimes use extremely specific terms, like "worker's state" for example. Also, I feel like in the context of Byzantium, treating the uprising as peasant-based would be more appropriate, as workers would be mostly insignificant for an uprising in that time period. You could talk about a peasant republic, kinda like Dithmarschen irl. Explore communist thought using a different terminology to reflect the different situation, but with the same underlying mentality.
Also, I found it hilarious how you turned dialectical materialism into a superpower.
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