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I wanted to share and get feedback on the first chapter of my book (www.wattpad.com)
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Hello! I wrote a book and I wanted to share the first chapter and get feedback. I have considered trying the whole nine and trying to get published, but I have a visual disability so editing is very hard for me, and honestly I don't think it's what any publisher is looking for anyway. If I get a good response I'll post more.

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[–] 3 points 2 years ago (1 child)

meow-floppy interesting meow-fiesta

I think, at the start (like first 2-3 paragraphs) there is a little bit too many adjectives/maybe too flowery. And is color theme important overall? we get lots of descriptions of colors, but not textures/smells/sounds?

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